From 7de96d72f30a495b45e5fa6af532cbe2e6b335fc Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: John Swinbank <swinbank@astron.nl>
Date: Fri, 26 Nov 2021 14:27:40 +0100
Subject: [PATCH] Act on comments from Gareth Hughes

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 %\aindex{Swinbank,~J.~D.}
 
 \begin{abstract}
-ESAP, the ESCAPE ESFRI Science Analysis Platform, is being developed to provide a flexible toolkit for constructing science platforms.
+ESAP, the ESFRI Science Analysis Platform, is being developed within the ESCAPE project to provide a flexible toolkit for constructing science platforms.
 It provides capabilities to quickly unite a range of data access and analysis services --- in particular those developed by the ESCAPE project --- behind a single, consistent but customizable, user interface.
 This paper provides a brief overview of ESAP's aims, its architecture, and its current and expected future capabilities.
 \end{abstract}
@@ -71,7 +71,7 @@ This paper provides a brief overview of ESAP's aims, its architecture, and its c
 \section{ESCAPE and ESAP}
 
 %\ssindex{organisations!European Strategy Forum on Research Infrastructures (ESFRI)}
-The ESCAPE Project\footnote{\url{https://www.projectescape.eu}} brings together the astronomy, astroparticle, and particle physics communities to address fundamental challenges in data-driven research, inspired by the goals and needs of major European research infrastructures, or ESFRIs.
+The ESCAPE project\footnote{\url{https://www.projectescape.eu}} brings together the astronomy, astroparticle, and particle physics communities to address fundamental challenges in data-driven research, inspired by the goals and needs of major European research infrastructures, or ESFRIs.
 
 %\ssindex{FAIR}
 %\ssindex{projects!EOSC}
@@ -93,7 +93,7 @@ ESAP will help users engage with the services provided by the other ESCAPE work
 \begin{itemize}
 
 \item{Data discovery and retrieval from a range of archives and data repositories;}
-\item{Exploration of, and discovery of relevant tools within, the ESCAPE software repository;}
+\item{Exploration and discovery of relevant tools within the ESCAPE software repository;}
 \item{Access to a range of compute and analysis services provided both by project partners and by other facilities;}
 \item{Orchestration of data, services, and software to help users create and access research environments that meet their particular needs.}
 
@@ -140,7 +140,7 @@ Some highlights of current capabilities include:
 \item{The capability to search and discover data on the Rucio\footnote{\url{https://rucio.cern.ch}}-based ESCAPE data lake;}
 \item{The ability to locate software in the ESCAPE project software repository, and to stage that software to BinderHub\footnote{\url{https://binderhub.readthedocs.io/}}-based interactive data analysis services;}
 \item{Bi-directional data transfer between the ESAP ``shopping basket'' and Python-based analysis services;}
-\item{Integration with the ESCAPE Project's Identity \& Access Management system.}
+\item{Integration with the ESCAPE project's Identity \& Access Management system.}
 
 \end{itemize}
 Future work is expected to focus on:
@@ -161,8 +161,9 @@ ESAP is available under the terms of the Apache license, version 2.0, from \url{
 A test system is available at \url{https://sdc-dev.astron.nl/esap-gui}.
 ESAP is currently under heavy development; stability and uptime are not guaranteed, but your feedback is always welcome.
 
-\acknowledgements ESCAPE European Science Cluster of Astronomy \& Particle physics ESFRI research Infrastructures has received funding from the European Union's Horizon 2020 research and innovation programme under the Grant Agreement n$^\mathrm{o}$ 824064.
+The ESCAPE community on Zenodo\footnote{\url{https://zenodo.org/search?page=1&size=20&q=escape2020}} provides access to a range of additional ESCAPE deliverables and documentation, as well as third party software packaged for use with ESAP.
 
+\acknowledgements ESCAPE European Science Cluster of Astronomy \& Particle physics ESFRI research Infrastructures has received funding from the European Union's Horizon 2020 research and innovation programme under the Grant Agreement n$^\mathrm{o}$ 824064.
 
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